In the midst of a heavy rain all we might see
is our good shoes getting wet
traveling down the desert path all we might see
is it is a long way to the river
at the end of a barrel of a gun all we might see
is all we love slipping away
staring down the trigger side of a gun all we might see
is everything we hate
at the edge of mountain top all we might see
is how far we could fall
yet in the deep valley at our darkest place
all we can see
is the way up
and start searching for the light.
Beautiful poem, Carrie, it stirs the soul and brings a smile to one's face. Your message is so true and so resounding, when we lose all else, there is still hope.
ReplyDeleteCarrie, beautiful poems... i hadn't been here for some time and i'm most happy to read not one but three beautiful poems of yours.
ReplyDeleteLove,
Ruth
Going down as I read ..all we get something
ReplyDeleteDown to the bottom the highest hope
Reading you is a must, carrie...
PS I think I already commented but it vanished, so just in case..
;)
Hugs
D.
Sam you are always an encouragment to me...thank you for being such a great blogging friend. :-)
ReplyDeleteRuth I hope you are having a great weekend and getting some much needed rest. Always wonderful to have you stop by. You are such a blessing to me! :-)
Hi Dulce so glad you came by and read this one...I have really been enjoying your beautiful poetry, Hugs to you to. :-) :-)
Lovely poem Carrie
ReplyDeleteThank you Madamebutterfly for stopping by and reading it...hope you have a great weekend! :-)
ReplyDeleteCarrie, this poem is filled with wonderful messages. I do think that sometime a person has to be in his/her darkest place in order to finally be drawn to the light.
ReplyDeleteSuch a positive and uplifting end to your poem. I really enjoyed reading it.
ReplyDeleteI agree with you about that Mary...thank you for reading it...I really enjoyed your poem for the prompt...it really makes you think about the inportance of sight! :-)
ReplyDeleteThank you Paul for stopping by. Have enjoyed reading all of your haiku. :-)
Dear Carrie,
ReplyDeleteReally wonderful - a reminder to see beyond. To reach for the light always.
Wonderful take on the prompt! Excellently crafted!
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Beautiful. I love how you can describe so well what it would be to look through at each of those things. I loved. Excellent!
ReplyDeleteNicely crafted poem ... the way the line breaks at "see" hold one in suspense for the next line.
ReplyDeleteI absolutely love this. What a wonderful piece!
ReplyDeleteVery masterfully structured
ReplyDeleteSoleful, plain language creating it's own nternal rhythm and beauty
Good write I love the trail that you have outlned
ReplyDeleteI love your various views and especially
ReplyDeletethe final one where you are searching
for the light. Such a positive finish!
"Freedom's just another word for nothin left to lose..."
ReplyDeletePerspective certainly sets up everything else, to be sure. To some real extent, a thing is whatever you THINK it is. I've been in that valley and it does concentrate everything into a sharp simplicity. Not ease, but simplicity.
A gentle and lovely poem, Carrie, and filled with hope.
ReplyDeleteMore often than we'd like do we find ourselves in a deep valley searching for light. It is life's great blessing that the light is always there if we reach high enough...
Hi Carrie, dragged us down then pointed the way up. Autobiographical? You seem happier! XX
ReplyDeleteI am overwhelmed by your wonderful and warm comments. It is such a blessing to know and share with you all.
ReplyDeleteStafford,it is to some degree autobiographical...i actually wrote this many years ago. I am happier...a lot of hard things are going on still right now...but I am still thriving. :-)
Perspective sure is an interesting thing. One moment we can see or feel one thing, and the next moment we can see or feel something totally different. It reminds us to try to keep a clear mind, to not jump to conclusions, and to not rush in judgement.
ReplyDeleteCarrie, This piece is incredible. It ends on wuch a great note of hope. Bravo!
ReplyDelete~Brenda
Carrie,
ReplyDeleteAn excellent view of the 'Eyes'.
Life itself a dark place at times, but helped along the way, by a chink of light.
Best wishes
Eileen
Hi JRM,Brenda,and Eileen glad you stopped by and liked it. :-)
ReplyDeleteCarrie, as usual you make the reader see what you see, literally - outstanding!
ReplyDeleteWow that is an awesome compliment...thank you Bob
ReplyDelete:-)
Masterpiece from beginning to end...I loved it xx
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thank you, it was brilliant x
ReplyDeleteI can only say that I really liked this for its airiness and light feel. Lovely.
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