One Shot Wednesday
I suppose the ocean learns it's longing from the shore that it must meet.
Yet, the soil feels it's constant touch from the roots below the trees.
And perhaps the dawn finds it from the horizon for which it always yearns.
Yet, the flame feels it's close quiver from the embers as they burn.
Maybe the eagle captures it's meaning from the need to reach the mountain and all it's charms.
Yet,for me I truly found it in one child within my arms.
this is super beautiful piece.
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lovely poem Carrie, on motherhood and that purposeful bond between mother and child...love the metaphor of the eagle to the mountain....life is full of beautiful purpose....bkm
ReplyDeleteA wonderful sentiment. Especially like the lines comprising the first sentence.
ReplyDeletewhew...beautiful....you brought that home nicely...i feel the same about my boys...nice one shot!
ReplyDeleteLove this. Normally "my child rocks" works don't grab me as a reader (they're often too trite/bathetic), but every word/image/metaphor worked here. Devastatingly (in a good way) effective end-line. . . one of my (now-)four favorite poems this week - along with Michael Perkins, Lady Nyo and Belinda Munoz.
ReplyDeleteToo beautiful indeed! nothing like this instinctive emotion of belonging..i like that one :)
ReplyDeleteWritten beautifully!One can feel the connection,the flow of each words as it connects to the next one.
ReplyDeleteNo love as strong as that of a Mother/Father to her/his child.Am so glad I found your place at one shot!
FABULOUS wordplay here. Love the flow and the stylistic approach. Love and Light, Sender
ReplyDeleteBeautiful imagery and sentiments expressed - loved the conclusion, a natural one
ReplyDeleteWhat a sweet poem--beautiful sentiments.
ReplyDeleteOh, Carrie, I share your sentiment. What a beautifully expressed thought!
ReplyDeleteDear Carrie
ReplyDeleteIts beautiful.. taking the metaphors of sea, earth, roots, horizon to bring it to the child in your arm. Lovely. I enjoyed it so much...
ॐ नमः शिवाय
Om Namah Shivaya
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wow carrie - this is fantastic - love it - love it - love it - every single word..think it's one of my favorites of you so far..
ReplyDeleteBeautiful poem. I love how you captured the longing for significance that we all have...and how we can find in each other and the world around us, especially children, a piece of God. Thanks for sharing! :)
ReplyDeleteWow. The imagery and emotional couplings here are just...mindblowing...amazingly wonderful work!
ReplyDeleteA beautiful piece, Carrie, so light and harmonious.
ReplyDeleteEnjoyed how you project feelings into the interaction of natural phenomena. To hold new life in one's hands for many inspires, even overwhelmingly.
ReplyDeleteThere is link, a connection between every atom of the universe! Only connect!
ReplyDeleteVery beautiful! i felt the flow as I read!
a wonderfully written poem..thanks for sharing with one shot
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