Saturday, January 13, 2018

Skinned Up Knees

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Linking with Imaginary Gardens for "Fussy Little Forms" ~ Chained Rhyme
Imagined by Marian

A "Chained Rhyme" is where  the last syllable or word of each line is followed by a rhyme on the first word or syllable of the next line.
Here is my attempt:

"Don't spend time beating on a wall, hoping to transform it into a door."
~Coco Chanel



I used to think that my skinned up knees were from the asphalt
fault always seemed easy to find in the path ahead
instead I learned that it was my own steps taken
break en' my groove all by myself and my choice in directions
affections drove me like gravity and magnet's pull
full of lessons learned down gravel roads
closed with signs say en' danger ahead
in red clear as day, but I kept going anyway!














11 comments:

  1. I think... that it's worth some bruises.... if we never explore we will grow roots. Love what you did with the prompt-

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  2. I enjoyed the sassy rhythm of this poem, Carrie, and the lines that touched my heart were:
    'affections drove me like gravity and magnet's pull
    full of lessons learned down gravel roads'.
    I still have problems staying on my feet!

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  3. Wonderful lilt and cadence in this, Carrie!💞

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  4. Nice! Yeah, I like the attitude in this, and also the extra cute rhymes in your last line which add emphasis for sure. I especially like "magnet's pull full of lessons," really nice.

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  5. Have you ever seen that Jim Carey movie where he's driving along, complaining that he just wants God to give him one little sign, and all the while he's surrounded by literal signs, some with flashing lights? Pretty funny stuff, but that's what we do.

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  6. I like the attitude too. A life lived well is worth a few bruises and skinned knees are how we learn.
    Love your write!
    Anna :o]

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  7. Perhaps the road less traveled? Nicely done.

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  8. We all have to suffer bruises to experience life. This is so well done.

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  9. Carrie, I like your "skinned knees" idea. And your rhyme worked fine. If it'll work I try what the song, "Detour, there's a muddy road ahead ..." elicits.
    That may be too old for you, some of it goes:
    ""

    https://www.google.com/search?sourceid=navclient&aq=&oq=Detour%2c+there%27s+a+muddy+road+ahead+&ie=UTF-8&rlz=1T4GGHP_enUS574US574&q=detour+there%27s+a+muddy+road+ahead+lyrics+&gs_l=hp..0.0l2j0i22i30l2.0.0.1.10047612...........0.5f1gJm34ZjA

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  10. That one messed up, here is a better one (I think)),
    "Detour Lyrics:

    Detour, there's a muddy road ahead, detour
    Paid no mind to what it said
    Detour, oh, these bitter things I find
    Should have read that detour sign

    Headed down life's crooked road
    Lots of things I never knowed
    Because of me not knowin', I now pine
    Trouble got in the trail
    Spent the next five years in jail
    Should have read that detour sign ..."
    https://genius.com/Tex-ritter-detour-lyrics
    ..

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  11. Love this. What's a few skinned knees anyways exchanged for a life fully lived? (thinks about it -- ok, maybe you should not do that -- that can get you killed!)

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